Its been said
Yea, the only thing I could think of is "This is just a rip of Wall-e" the only difference, unfortunately, was the animation was very choppy. I understand if you havent animated a lot though, I can see you have potential, I think if you keep animating you'll be great at it : ) You have a nice cartoony art style, I think it could be developed into a little bit more of an original style but its still not bad.
Back to the story being too similar to Wall-e though, you could have sent the same message to us in a different way than Wall-e did. In Wall-e the people have computers in front of their faces like that, and then when one guy's computer malfunctions he can see a woman and they fall in love and see the world's beauty. Its the saaame thing.
To improve it you could have done it so many ways, like some guy is at his computer at work and finally the computer gets a virus or something and he has no idea what to do so he gets fired and then kicked out and then instead of getting a new job he begins to discover the world for its beauty with the time he has. You dont have to do that exact idea, but I am just saying you could have done it differently instead of take Wall-e's story exactly. If I were you I'd remake something similar when you're even better at animating and then showing us how creative your mind really can get : )
I want to see more originality! : D
Over all Ill give you
7/10
4/5